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Beguiling Trickery Chani Lynn Feener

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Kenna Erikson knows absolutely nothing about Norse mythology. Which is daunting, considering she's a volur, a type of seer the Vikings believed garnered favor with the gods. For the most part, she ignores her gifts, and the useless ability to foresee thirty or so seconds into the future. For as long as she can remember, she's had only herself to rely on, and she likes that just fine. However, when shadows suddenly come alive and attack her, she's forced to seek outside help in the form of tall, blonde, and infinitely annoying, Luka. Somehow, Luka knows all about her attackers, and the mythology they spring from. He's also eager to help out, despite the fact they've only just met. But what secret is he keeping? Who is he really? And why does her heart flip every time he's around?

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  • Heat

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  • Tears

    5

  • Laughs

    8

  • Thrills

    8

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69 comments on "Beguiling Trickery"

Trishla30 on March 15, 2016, 12:48 a.m. said:

Trishla30


good so far, maybe the author can explain Kenna's background together, instead of short insights. Well atleast not repeat the same thing..

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Chani Lynn Feener on March 31, 2016, 2:06 p.m. said:

Chani Lynn Feener


I completely agree! I made a notes to cut down on the repetitiveness during edits. Thanks for your feedback!

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J.J.Hill on Feb. 8, 2016, 6:01 p.m. said:

J.J.Hill


I loved the mythology on this story. While I felt it got repetitive at times, especially with retelling the woes of Kenna's childhood over and over, I couldn't stop reading. Great job!

I guess I would, very loosely, compare it to the Sookie Stackhouse books, but only because Alex Skaarsguard would make a pretty awesome Luka. I guess it's the viking thing.

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Chani Lynn Feener on Feb. 9, 2016, 1:36 p.m. said:

Chani Lynn Feener


I'm pretty much in love with Alexander Skarsgard, so that was an exciting comparison! I've never thought of him as Luka before, but now I probably won't be able to stop.

Thanks for reading! I'm really glad that you liked it, and the characters.

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Andrea.Heltsley on April 21, 2016, 10:27 p.m. said:

Andrea.Heltsley


I pictured Aleksander Skaarsguard as Luka too!!!!! ❤️❤️❤️

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J.J.Hill on Feb. 7, 2016, 4:55 p.m. said:

J.J.Hill


I am finding Kenna really relatable. I am already intrigued by Luka too. The pace is just right and I can't wait to keep reading!

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Cat2000 on Jan. 12, 2016, 10:55 p.m. said:

Cat2000


(I received a free copy of this book in exchange for a review).

(This review may contain spoilers).

When I read the blurb of this book, I was immediately intrigued... if a little hesitant, due to quite a number of bad experiences with good-sounding books.

I liked Kenna's character in this book. While I did think there were a few instances where there was a lack of foreshadowing... and several instances of info-dumping... I found Kenna to be a fairly strong character. It was interesting to see her having to deal with the abilities she had and how those made her an outcast in her school.

I did enjoy seeing Kenna's friendship with Fiske and Parker. It was good to see that she did have friends who she confided in... even though there were times they seemed a bit wrapped up in each other.

It wasn't very hard for me to figure out who Luka was... but it was interesting to read the conversations about the myths and what the characters said about Ragnarok. Plus, it was really good to see that the author didn't go for the really obvious bad guy.

I did feel like there was a bit too much telling rather than showing going on, such as Kenna's relationship with her mother. Plus, there was a lot of repetition about Kenna's upbringing and how she had to fend for herself.

It was interesting to see how Kenna viewed Kari and I liked the fact that she considered Kari to be a person separate to herself. It was good to see that, although she was drawn to Luka and attracted to him, it didn't feel like a love at first sight situation. I wasn't sure I was entirely happy with the way things did go... but the situation did feel easy and natural to the characters.

I also liked that, although Kenna had feelings towards Luka, she also had her own life to live. But my hackles did get raised when Luka was jealously possessive of her and it was good to see she wasn't cowed by it.

I'd like to read the next book/s in this series. It would be good to see Kenna develop her abilities and to learn more about her past with Luka. I did find this book entertaining and easy to read and I would check out other books by this author in the future.

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Lisa Borne Graves on Jan. 11, 2016, 9:45 p.m. said:

Lisa Borne Graves


I liked the characters a lot; although both intensely stubborn, it fit and worked within the story. The plot was interesting and founded on mythology which I love. Being somewhat familiar with Norse mythology, I was able to guess who Luka was off the bat (his name being so close), but the others were a nice twist. I found it a bit misleading that the Trickster god doesn't really do much mischief; he proclaims he has dark and light in him (I love that line), yet I didn't see much in either direction. I loved the fighter in Kenna that she wasn't helpless and how she struggled against the alpha male type for autonomy.
The largest problem I had was the book could be boiled down to a solid and amazing 200 pages rather than almost 400. A lot of the time the author repeated ideas, especially in the beginning where we hear how poor she is about seven times, revisits her father's death several times, and her entire history. Back stories gave the character depth, but wasn't very exciting and it didn't really tie in to the events of the story. Also, I had issues with the point of view. First, we are lost in her thoughts with her a lot: a stream-of-conscious feel which becomes very repetitive, then it mostly is third person limited omniscient as we see and know only what Kenna sees (I like this; it adds mystery), but sometimes the point of view slips up and Kenna knows too much or guesses too much what other people think or feel (and it isn't clearly part of her gift). I found myself skimming through the first 25% of the book and almost gave up. It quickly turns into a different book from there on and I couldn't put it down. What I would suggest the author to do is cut the entire beginning of the book and start with one introductory scene at her job to get to know her and move directly to where she meets Luka at the party. We can meet her besties there too. Also, the mythology was a bit overloaded at one point. I'm not sure how to fix this (because it is needed) besides having it broken up. Also things felt contrived at times, like suddenly without prior mention, she's a fighter, and I don't understand the Jason role at all except a device for jealousy. I was expecting him to be someone else interesting from the myth world and was disappointed. I was confused that she never caught onto something important because Luka kept hinting to her "always" doing something or acting a certain way (implying more than just Kari). I found it strange she never caught on since she seemed intelligent. This is also a loose end never explained of how or why history is repeating itself or who the Triskster's Triskster is (I think I know but it is a guess), but I figure the loose ends show it will be a series.
The grammar needs work (commas, apostrophes, homophones are the most frequent issues). A copy editor could help with this. Last, there are times where the character contradicts herself. Things like her mother having an apartment, then a trailer, being neglectful, then loving, then having a bad relationship with her. It's confusing and I had to go back to check thinking I was crazy. Honestly, I think most of the drawbacks were in the first 25% of the novel and if cut my rating would be much higher.

I would say this is a lot like Twilight where a girl is immersed into a paranormal world, but she is stronger than Bella which I preferred. He is your typical Byronic hero, just like Edward. He was more fun than Edward, not so morose self-loathing. He was cocky and confident which I found amusing and appealing.

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Chani Lynn Feener on Jan. 15, 2016, 8:18 p.m. said:

Chani Lynn Feener


Thanks for all your feedback, Lisa! I do agree that it needs to be cut down in places. I've been working on doing that since I posted this months ago! I like the idea of starting at the coffee shop and quickly moving onto the party. I'll definitely keep that in mind.

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A. E. Cummings on Dec. 28, 2015, 6:07 p.m. said:

A. E. Cummings


Another wonderful book, i wrote a book that used Norse Mythology and its nice to see other people use it. X

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