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Boxed In Diana Hurlburt

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Racing fangirl Tallis has given up on talking her parents into letting her train to become a jockey. As summer starts up, she’s ready to skateboard, play bass in her punk band, and ignore her senior year to-do list. She didn’t anticipate landing a dream job exercising horses for a local farm...or falling in love with a Thoroughbred trainer’s daughter.

Jessa's a beautiful, ambitious cheerleader who didn't inherit her mother's love for horses--but opposites attract, and Tallis finds herself gearing up for her first real relationship. Then Jessa drops a bombshell that leaves Tallis wondering whether love is worth pursuing if it isn't meant to last.

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  • About 294 pages
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  • Heat

    7

  • Tears

    6

  • Laughs

    8

  • Thrills

    7

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26 comments on "Boxed In"

Willowcabins on Nov. 21, 2017, 11:53 p.m. said:

Willowcabins


wow, this is a real good book. the characterization is great, the plot is interesting, and the world building is EXCELLENT.

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Diana Hurlburt on Nov. 22, 2017, 11:11 a.m. said:

Diana Hurlburt


Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed. Since this project is not the first in its universe, I'm happy to hear the world feels lived in. :)

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Wren Parker on Nov. 8, 2017, 3:45 p.m. said:

Wren Parker


I loved everything about this and wouldn't change a thing, and I would eagerly read a sequel or in-universe tie-in about Tallis or any of the other characters here! This was a really fun, refreshing read.

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Diana Hurlburt on Nov. 8, 2017, 6:45 p.m. said:

Diana Hurlburt


Thanks again for taking a look! I'm so happy to hear you enjoyed the story. It's actually the third project in a larger universe full of queer horse enthusiasts (I'm...a one-trick pony, myself :B), which are all in various states of revision and/or out in the publishing ether. You can find some side stories featuring Tallis and other characters here, though: http://dianahurlburt.tumblr.com/tagged/u%3A-honeycomb-hills

Thank you for spending time in Ocala and for your kind words!

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Wren Parker on Nov. 9, 2017, 3:34 p.m. said:

Wren Parker


:D :D :D I can't wait to check out those side stories on tumblr and meet all the rest of your queer horse enthusiasts once they emerge from the publishing ether! :D :D :D

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Wren Parker on Nov. 7, 2017, 9:12 a.m. said:

Wren Parker


I'm really loving this so far! I love that Tallis's personality and characterization are so well developed, but all the other characters still feel real and unique too, with their own thoughts and interests. The pace is good and the world feels real: there's a great balance here between moving the story along and giving the reader time to sink into the lives of the characters. (Also, I'm a huge sucker for sweet family interactions-- parents who care, siblings who tease each other about their crushes-- and there's been so much of that so far. I love it. As a queer reader I'm also a sucker for characters who are just gay, without hangups or apology, and thanks for that. <3) Really looking forward to digging into the rest of this!

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Diana Hurlburt on Nov. 7, 2017, 5:13 p.m. said:

Diana Hurlburt


Wow, thank you! I love writing romantic relationships, but friendships and family interactions are so rewarding too. I'm glad you're enjoying Tallis's world and people. Thanks for checking it out! :)

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November on Aug. 10, 2017, 7:34 p.m. said:

November


EVERYTHING!!!!!

Nothing! I have never read anything like it!

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Diana Hurlburt on Aug. 11, 2017, 2:45 p.m. said:

Diana Hurlburt


Thanks for giving it a look! I'm glad you enjoyed.

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edutton on May 5, 2017, 9:10 p.m. said:

edutton


I kept waiting for something bad to happen, some contrived crisis - and then it didn't! I love slice-of-life stories, and this is that in buckets... Just a quiet little love story. <3 Both girls felt very real and relatable, and I appreciated that there was a realistic degree of angst (teens, after all!) but not overblown, and that our heroine knows who she wants to be. (And that she's built a queer community even in a place as small as Ocala, because that's just what happens.)

The biggest thing I kept tripping over - and it's throughout the book - is about 500% too many, like, "likes". I have a teen, and she says "like" correctly WAY more often than she uses it as an interjection. That, and the end felt a little abrupt: it's not a bad place to stop the story at all, but just a few more sentences would help it feel more finished.

Overall, I enjoyed it quite a bit and I think it definitely has potential to be publishable with just a bit more editing. Good job!

Honestly, the closest comparison I have (and it's a "feel"/theme thing rather than being based on the plot) is the manga "Girl Friends".

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