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Breakthrough Rebecca Leigh

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Zephyr DiLauro is the star of the school's drama club. But that's about the only thing she's got going for her anymore. She's got a cocky ex-boyfriend she doesn't want to star opposite. She has a super religious best friend who has a great boyfriend. She has a mother who can't seem to make a good decision. She just wants everything to be picture perfect, the way it is in the plays that she stars in.

Eli Booker has a great life from the outside. He's a star baseball player. He comes from a picture perfect family. But behind the facade is a history of abuse and a teenager who just wants to be able to be himself. With the support of his new friend, Aiden Marshall, Eli joins the drama club.

What ensues is a relationship no one saw coming and the passion of first love.

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  • 52041 words
  • About 208 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    4

  • Tears

    6

  • Laughs

    4

  • Thrills

    3

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17 comments on "Breakthrough"

Locket on Dec. 4, 2016, 7:09 p.m. said:

Locket


I'm enjoying the story and the interplay between the characters. The role of Cienna is a little stereotyped and you might find that any Christian readers might be turned off by it. I'm not too keen on it and a little offended but I'll keep going because I like the lead.

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Nicola Uy on June 28, 2016, 6:39 a.m. said:

Nicola Uy


nice :)

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Lucky_Penny_13 on May 15, 2016, 4:18 p.m. said:

Lucky_Penny_13


Awwwwwwww! really cute story, and very well written...

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BrennaMae on May 1, 2016, 7:41 p.m. said:

BrennaMae


It was okay; too much dialogue though, I didn't know what the main characters were feeling half the time.

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BrennaMae on April 27, 2016, 4:14 p.m. said:

BrennaMae


It's alright so far

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bogun on Dec. 28, 2015, 9:26 p.m. said:

bogun


You can't just leave me hanging! The book was so well written. I didn't find spelling or grammatical mistakes. It had a great plot. Overall, it's a wonderful book.

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Emmab on Dec. 24, 2015, 10:18 p.m. said:

Emmab


There are a few errors in this book. Most of them are grammar problems. Other than that it was really good.

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Emmab on Dec. 24, 2015, 5:07 p.m. said:

Emmab


There are tiny mistakes like. Too or to. And it instead of is. But other than that it's good and interesting.

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Eva Moynihan on Nov. 22, 2015, 7:20 p.m. said:

Eva Moynihan


I liked the plot line and the supporting characters of Vienna and Aidan. But:
First, the story moved WAY too fast. the transitions were too sudden and the story was choppy. There were a few spelling and grammar mistakes that can be fixed with a simple read through.
Also, love at first sight is cool, but I didn't feel there was any depth to it. I would have liked to see the characters develop more, including the supporting characters like Brett, Marissa, Dakota, Christofe, Zeph's family, and of course, Zeph and Eli. their love needed more of a basis to it than was explained in the story.
It was i was an excellent idea, but there is definitely room for improvement.
Thanks for sharing and always always always keep writing!

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savannahmasterson on Oct. 1, 2015, 5:42 p.m. said:

savannahmasterson


What did you like about the story? Any suggestions on how the writer could improve it?

The idea was good! But the story was very choppy, there needs to be a little more editing.

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