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Chiron's Descent Carol van Zalingen

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Marlene Prescott suffers through an education in a crowded Ohio high school. After a tarot card reading, she writes a letter to a soul mate she doubts she will ever meet and then buries it along with CDs of all her journals, musings, and stories in a portable safe. She forgets about it until a handsome yet mysterious senior named John enrolls at her school. Intrigued and inexorably drawn toward John, Marlene soon discovers he is unlike anyone she has ever known: he understands animals and communicates with her dead aunt's spirit. While John tries to keep many things from Marlene, above all he must hide the truth about his origins and her fate. Chiron's Descent portrays the beginning of John and Marlene's journey as they discover the kind of love neither one thought was possible.

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  • 73660 words
  • About 295 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    9

  • Tears

    8

  • Laughs

    8

  • Thrills

    8

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53 comments on "Chiron's Descent"

Theresa Anne on July 7, 2017, 3:43 p.m. said:

Theresa Anne


I enjoyed this book and would love to read more about what happens to Marlene and John.

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Gimhani on Jan. 2, 2017, 5:56 p.m. said:

Gimhani


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JS Deaton on Dec. 3, 2016, 2:15 a.m. said:

JS Deaton


This is an amazing story. I loved everything about it. The characters were wonderful. An excellent read.

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JS Deaton on Dec. 2, 2016, 12:03 a.m. said:

JS Deaton


This story is very well written. It is intriguing, as are the characters. I am enjoying it; and curious where the story is going to take me.

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djinnia on Sept. 5, 2016, 11:01 a.m. said:

djinnia


I like this a lot. The mystery of the shimmer and the characters' personalities are very cool. The mystery guy is intriguing.

The only thing that sort of bugged me is the reactions to the freaky stuff that's happening. Their reactions are a bit blasé to me. Where are the gasps of whoa and the stunned silence or the squeaks of shock. Wide eyes and jaws dropping. Body language is a big part of conveying a persons reactions in a story without saying it directly.

It doesn't have to be much. A fine example is where you had Macy grab his manly bits when she said she would eviserate him. It not only showed his stupidity it showed the reader that he is a coward and frightened of her for some reason. This made me interested in in the back story between the two to have him fear her that much, especially when he had his two friends to back him up.

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rosie brooks on May 9, 2016, 8:24 p.m. said:

rosie brooks


I really liked reading this, it was great!

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Sarah Pringle on Oct. 6, 2015, 8:41 p.m. said:

Sarah Pringle


What did you like about the story? Any suggestions on how the writer could improve it?

Need more!

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Sarah Pringle on Oct. 5, 2015, 10:44 p.m. said:

Sarah Pringle


What do you like so far? Any suggestions on how the writer could improve the story?

Like it!

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Shamara Peart on Oct. 3, 2015, 9:39 p.m. said:

Shamara Peart


What do you like so far? Any suggestions on how the writer could improve the story?

So far, I'm enjoying the book. It's different than anything else I've ever read, and there's just enough suspense that has me not wanting to go anywhere. Great job! :)

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Phine Lee on Sept. 24, 2015, 6:42 a.m. said:

Phine Lee


What do you like so far? Any suggestions on how the writer could improve the story?

the science and math references are interesting

What popular book or story would you compare it to?

The raven boys, for the psychic and occult
The mediator
Poison Princess, for hallucinations and visions

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