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Cloak & Dagger C.R. Termini

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Haden counts the days until he can finally pay off his debt, allowing him to leave the service of The Rat—Syva's very own spymaster. When he receives his final mark, he's surprised to find his last assignment will be to gather information for the assassins about the insufferable Princess Vena, cousin to the king of Syva. But as the pair gets closer, Haden learns she has a deadly and magical secret of her own. Vena is a healer—a fate punishable by death in Syva—and when Haden learns this, his sudden feelings of guilt force him to refuse to pass information on to the assassins. After all, he'd never expected to fall for the girl he was supposed to help kill.

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  • About 311 pages
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  • Heat

    8

  • Tears

    5

  • Laughs

    6

  • Thrills

    5

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11 comments on "Cloak & Dagger"

Eliza Rosewood on Nov. 6, 2017, 7:46 p.m. said:

Eliza Rosewood


I loved how strong Vena is and the two main characters are more similar than realized. The take on magic was more subtle than I've seen and I appreciated the freshness. Only critique is to look for overused words and provide a couple more descriptions as you go. I hope there will be more books in this world!

Similar Stories : Kind of made me think of Throne of Glass with the witty remarks of both characters and general feel of the world created in the novel.

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C.R. Termini on Nov. 6, 2017, 7:51 p.m. said:

C.R. Termini


Thanks <3

I'll definitely check for that on my next read-through.

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Eliza Rosewood on Nov. 6, 2017, 4:35 p.m. said:

Eliza Rosewood


So far I like the story! My only suggestion would be dropping in hints about the main characters backstory slowly as you go. However that is simply a preference so take that with a grain of salt. I like the MC and already feel for him so I am interested in seeing where the story goes!

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TDoran80 on Nov. 4, 2017, 11:12 p.m. said:

TDoran80


Very intriguing, I'm only through about ten percent but interested to see what happens as the story progresses.

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Renae Mercado on Oct. 29, 2017, 4:10 p.m. said:

Renae Mercado


This was a great story that pulled me in. I loved the characters and had to keep reading to find out what would happen next. The only suggestion I would have is to weave in a few more details about the politics of magic vs. non magic to further immerse readers in your story. Well done!

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C.R. Termini on Oct. 29, 2017, 4:15 p.m. said:

C.R. Termini


Thank you so much!

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Renae Mercado on Oct. 22, 2017, 11:12 p.m. said:

Renae Mercado


An interesting concept. Can't wait to read more!

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B.R. Myers on Oct. 9, 2017, 6:34 p.m. said:

B.R. Myers


The voice is spot on. I’m cheering for the hero already. Great job setting up the conflict. Nice writing style, reads like Dickens.

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C.R. Termini on Oct. 9, 2017, 8:02 p.m. said:

C.R. Termini


Thank you so much!

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Georgia Keyes on Oct. 6, 2017, 7:04 p.m. said:

Georgia Keyes


I literally could not stop reading this. The stakes are laid out right from the beginning and I was on the edge of my seat the whole time.
The characterizations are really well done and I found myself invested in all the characters and their happiness. Great job there.
Obviously there will be more books following this one, but it might help to give a little more detail about the political climate, especially with the magic/non-magic dynamics, so the reader can really understand the world you've built.

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