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First Down to Love Rebecca Leigh

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Milo Aikens is a journalist first and foremost. She does not care who she offends with her words because, as far as she is concerned, she speaks the truth. Drew Prentice is the quarterback of the football team who is not, repeat not, looking for a relationship of any kind. He likes to screw around and enjoy his life while he still can.

When Milo is assigned to a football article because the regular writer is out of town, Drew is unhappy about the too honest Milo Aikens writing the article about his football game. When her article comes out and she rips apart his team and his leadership, Drew is determined to get her back...by joining the school paper. The advisor of the paper assigns them to a...a dating column?!

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  • 49264 words
  • About 197 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    7

  • Tears

    3

  • Laughs

    6

  • Thrills

    4

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54 comments on "First Down to Love"

Emily Hollman on June 17, 2017, 5:02 p.m. said:

Emily Hollman


I liked the story line, but at some parts this story was hard to understand because of all the typos. Also, I liked Milo's character, but Drew seemed a bit shallow and hard to relate to.

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Emily Hollman on June 17, 2017, 2:02 p.m. said:

Emily Hollman


There are some spelling errors, but otherwise it's a good story.

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C.J Albert on June 17, 2017, 1:18 p.m. said:

C.J Albert


It was a great read. I love how the family was mentioned throughout it because in some stories the families of the main characters seem to just disappear, however I think, personally, that Drew and Milo fell in love a bit to quick and I didn't really feel the connection between them. It would be great if more of the dates they went on were mentioned, as well. Overall, I enjoyed reading it and wouldn't really change any major details, just add some to establish the connection between them and the journey they went on to fall in love.

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ShawMcKnight on May 18, 2017, 6:30 p.m. said:

ShawMcKnight


This story left me split right down the middle. I loved Milo but felt Drew's character was left unfinished. The concept for this story was great. milo's family was fun and interesting but drew's family had huge holes in it. If his dad is a problem in his life I want to actually feel it, see it, and be personally invested in it. The story was 50/50 for me. The milo side amazing and the drew side empty.

With everything said and done, I think this story could stand apart from others. It just needs some more depth. Some boyfriend improvements and it could be really good.

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ShawMcKnight on May 17, 2017, 8:26 p.m. said:

ShawMcKnight


I like Milo (even though she's kind of a pain) and can see where this is headed in the right direction. I can't wait to see if there's some chemistry between the main characters.

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Bella on March 2, 2017, 6:51 p.m. said:

Bella


This was extremely adorable! There were some punctuation and grammatical errors, but that's to be expected when it's a first draft. I loved the familial relationships; it really made the characters relatable. And I love everything to do with the school newspaper trope because I work on MY school newspaper. Alas, I will not be having a sordid love affair. Great job!

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swoonygirl on Jan. 18, 2017, 1:58 p.m. said:

swoonygirl


I've only read chapter one and am debating if I will continue. So far the story is fun, but the typos are not. On the first or second page there is a capitalization error, near the end of the chapter it reads something like, "with twenty-five seconds less" instead of left. And there were others. Every time there is a typo like this it brings the reading to a halt. Not sure if I will continue.

I also just noticed that this is only 49k words. Most YA's or novels in general have a minimum of 60k.

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PointPi on Oct. 7, 2016, 2:18 a.m. said:

PointPi


This is a great idea and it's great that Milo is willing to stand behind her articles.

However, there is way too much telling and not enough showing.
The build up to the article being published is too slow.
Drew's POV sounds very feminine and too similar to Milo's POV.
It would be great to actually see some of the actions of the characters. Drew says he's a bad boy but then he is whining about the game. The characterization needs to be tighter.
The idea is there but the execution need a lot of polish. There are a few typos here and there and the scene jumps are difficult to navigate.
There are some really great moments but they are pretty far and few between.

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Leslie Anne on Sept. 6, 2016, 9:55 a.m. said:

Leslie Anne


The story got me hooked from the start, and I believe that it has something to do with the opinionated female character. The romantic build-up of the two characters is slow and steady, which I really like. So, despite some inconsistencies, typos and rough transition between scenes, I think this story is promising and enjoyable to read.

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Leslie Anne on Sept. 6, 2016, 7:28 a.m. said:

Leslie Anne


I'm amused with Milo and her internal dialogues. The author has written her opinionated character so well. As for Drew, I sympathized with him. The change in POV has done justice to the characters that I find it easy to recognize whose thoughts I have invaded :) The story is light and entertaining. I can't wait to see how their relationship will grow.

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