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First Down to Love Rebecca Leigh

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Milo Aikens is a journalist first and foremost. She does not care who she offends with her words because, as far as she is concerned, she speaks the truth. Drew Prentice is the quarterback of the football team who is not, repeat not, looking for a relationship of any kind. He likes to screw around and enjoy his life while he still can.

When Milo is assigned to a football article because the regular writer is out of town, Drew is unhappy about the too honest Milo Aikens writing the article about his football game. When her article comes out and she rips apart his team and his leadership, Drew is determined to get her back...by joining the school paper. The advisor of the paper assigns them to a...a dating column?!

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  • About 197 pages
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  • Heat

    7

  • Tears

    3

  • Laughs

    6

  • Thrills

    4

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70 comments on "First Down to Love"

Ag. Mylene on April 8, 2018, 8:07 p.m. said:

Ag. Mylene


I was a cute story but in-depth enough for me. The characters were not developed enough.

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Love Books on April 7, 2018, 4:35 a.m. said:

Love Books


I Loved it!!!

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Love Books on April 7, 2018, 1:30 a.m. said:

Love Books


Pretty good so far, I honk that you could add a few more details and some More inner thinking but overall it is good so far.

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Ag. Mylene on April 6, 2018, 4:10 p.m. said:

Ag. Mylene


I think the conversations between the characters could be more realistic if the personalities are taken in count. Everyone sounds too generic to me. And Drew's personality is ambiguous, all that I can tell is that he is an insecure and nice guy that is attracted to Milo, but it seems like he is portrayed by others as being narcissistic and mean, which doesn't show in his chapter.
More depth will be nice too. The story is too fast. But I like it, it's easy to read and I want to know what happens next so, that's good.

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Charli Denae on Jan. 24, 2018, 7:50 p.m. said:

Charli Denae


Great story! I love the ‘enemies to lovers’ trope. The characters were endearing but realistic, and not overly dramatic. The plot kept me interested and looking forward to what was going to happen next. I did think that the male characters sleeping over at the females’ houses was a bit unbelievable. At sixteen years old, I’m not convinced that Alexi’s parents wouldn’t have an issue with guys staying over. Maybe it could be mentioned that her parents were gone a lot and seemed not to care what she did. As for Holland, it was briefly mentioned that her parents were gone but not whether they had come home, or not. It’s not a big deal but it’s the only thing that seemed ‘off’ to me. I also noticed quite a few typos so having someone edit would be a plus. That’s all I’ve got. Best of luck!

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Charli Denae on Jan. 24, 2018, 2:57 a.m. said:

Charli Denae


Good story, so far. The characters’ personalities are established and the build up to when the article comes out has me anticipating the fun, already. Also, the little hints we got from Drew noticing Milo at the party, ups the anticipation. My only complaint is that the story needs some editing.

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J Alicia on Jan. 12, 2018, 7:18 p.m. said:

J Alicia


Great title, really cute premise and wonderful characters! I enjoyed spending time with Drew and Milo!

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J Alicia on Jan. 7, 2018, 5:01 p.m. said:

J Alicia


Great chapter ending - I am definitely hooked! I love sports stories and anything with football absolutely will draw me in. I would just double-check your research. I'm pretty open to variances in what one high school might do versus another, but there were some elements that seemed a little implausible to me. And I did feel there was a bit much back story in the last chapter. But I am very intrigued to see where this thing with Drew and Milo goes so reading on! :)

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averylyons on Nov. 24, 2017, 7:37 p.m. said:

averylyons


Great story idea over all!! Drew's side of the story kept me more drawn in. Would love it in just his perspective. A lot of plot holes. There was only one date, and she didn't really come off as bitchy. I think there's a lot of missing parts to the story but the story idea is great and an awesome first draft.

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averylyons on Nov. 24, 2017, 1:21 p.m. said:

averylyons


I think the story would be better written from Drew's perspective only. It's hard to read through Milo's.

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