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Forty-One After Midnight Kelli Rajala

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Nicole Reynolds has been moved around from school to school most of her life, and so far they've all been the same. Snobby. She's never been like the other kids. Her hopes aren't high for Oak Ridge Academy, but she's willing to suck it up for her final year.

While at her new school, however, Nicole learns that something isn't quite right this time, and she's not yet sure if that's a good thing. She has strange dreams that she can't figure out, and she sees suspicious activity in the main building at odd hours of the night. What's even more surprising is that these strange things seem to be bringing her closer to the friends she's made in unexpected ways.

Nicole finally feels at home, but what is it that actually makes her feel this way? Her friends? The cozy buildings? Or something entirely different that she can't place?

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  • About 193 pages
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  • Tears

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  • Laughs

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15 comments on "Forty-One After Midnight"

mongo on April 15, 2017, 9:42 p.m. said:

mongo


She takes a good idea and does clever things with it. The main character's voice is authentic, her thoughts and feelings seem real, and it has a satisfying conclusion. There are some minor grammatical issues, but nothing hard to fix. Good job!

Nothing I can think of -- that's another reason I like it.

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caralin on March 13, 2017, 4:02 p.m. said:

caralin


I'm a sucker for a good ghost story, and a bunch of ghosts stuck at a boarding school for two hundred years is just that. I think this could do well as a middle grade novel. However, I think if you want to market this as young adult and have it be successful with that audience, it will need some major overhaul to really amp up the plot and mature the writing.

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mongo on March 11, 2017, 9:37 p.m. said:

mongo


I like it. I'm waiting to find out about the night-time goings-on in the school building.

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caralin on March 9, 2017, 5:18 p.m. said:

caralin


I think this is a nice, sweet start to the story. So far I like the characters. Nothing has really pulled me in yet, but I am interested enough to keep reading. At this point, I feel like this is definitely something that would do well with younger teens.

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Chelsea Mason on Feb. 23, 2017, 10:39 p.m. said:

Chelsea Mason


Catchy title! There was a really good foreshadow in the beginning to hook and I liked the subtle way to let people know the year with the grad class.

Overall, I think your idea is interesting, the dream, the girl asking for help, Nicole not getting it at first. But that was just a sliver in the first two and a half chapters, and the rest felt like fill. Following are some things I noticed, if you'd like to read. Otherwise my main comment would be to get to the meat of the story quicker, or in a more interesting way.

For the first two chapters, I really think dwelling on each class took way too long, and frankly, Nicole trying to convince us that she's different than everyone around her. She actually seems just as snobbish and a jerk as everyone else. She judges Kyle (even though she swears she doesn't stereotype and she's not homophobic), she's rude to everyone, she doesn't care about school, she thought she'd die if she was with someone who liked hot pink, but has 'pretty purple frames', has a HOT PINK lamp and several other bright colors. I just don't find myself connecting with her like I want to. She's telling me she's different, but I'm not seeing it shown in her actions, which could be interesting if that's intended (a lot of Victorian lit getting into misleading narratives, having to read into the narrator and what they're saying versus what's actually happening), but I don't think that's what was intended here.

Also, how did her stuff get to the school, since we just see her getting dropped off at the start of the actual school day, and why did the mom drop her off at the beginning of a school day if she was actually going to be living there, wouldn't she have gotten there before, like a week before school started, or even the Sunday (or whatever day) before?

And why does her family move around so much? If her family's so rich, why doesn't the dad (or mom, whoever the money-maker is, or both), just travel for work, leaving her at the same school?

There is almost no dialogue, which only gives a lot of time for telling, dialogue would help with letting the characters show more I think, plus it's highschool. Kids talk. A lot. Dialogue's only going to make things more interesting.

Like I said earlier, I do really like the idea behind this story, I just think the structure around the heart of it needs some attention.

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Lucas1701 on Feb. 5, 2017, 11:15 a.m. said:

Lucas1701


I really liked how in depth you got to know the characters. There was a large group of people, 41 is a lot to have to keep track of but the author only really has you follow around 3-4 of them. I guess I would have liked to. Experience more of back in time stuff. Maybe more dream experiences about that. Maybe a bit more suspense at the end that maybe this wasn't going to work or maybe this was the wrong effect could have finished it off more dramatically.

It's not a story or book but this remind me a ton of Stranger Things. The whole trapped in another dimension or time is an awesome concept to work with. I suggest to the author to make more magic and timey stories.

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T. K. Yeager on Feb. 3, 2017, 6:34 p.m. said:

T. K. Yeager


Hey there Kelli! Just finished the third chapter. It's an interesting book so far! I still don't know too much about what the main plot is though. You spent a lot of time talking about the school and not too much time talking about the mysterious happenings in the school. Maybe consider speeding up your plot so some other major things happen in the very beginning to capture the readers interest more fully.

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Wendy on Feb. 1, 2017, 12:02 p.m. said:

Wendy


I liked how the author started the story and kept you pulled in until the very end. I wanted to keep on reading and find out what was really going on and see how it all would end. I like the way the author explained the people, place and characters. You got to know them all and feel how their lives were like in the past and also the present. I hope this author keeps on writing. I would read more of her stories. A++++++

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Mnyman on Jan. 31, 2017, 11:26 p.m. said:

Mnyman


I like that the writer describe every person in an interesting way. You want to know more about them. It's an very interesting story so far and I can't wait till next chapter.

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Lucas1701 on Jan. 29, 2017, 12:42 a.m. said:

Lucas1701


I reall like how at the end of this chapter you kinda have a basis for the rest of the story. You know who everyone is at this point that really is going to matter. I greatly enjoy how much of a mystery has been put forth in whet seem like very little writing. Very good work! I can't wait to keep reading.

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