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From India Jennifer Bellevue

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India Taylor has arrived in London from the British Colony of India, still reeling in the aftermath of her mother's suicide. Not content to simply stand by while the British officer responsible for her mother's death runs free in London, India has vowed to avenge her, no matter the cost. Enlisting the help of her family's former servant, turned heir apparent to an Earldom, she begins her investigation, all the while dodging the increasingly sinister attentions of Lord Russell, the Earl of Brookhaven.

The course of revenge never did run smooth.

A Victorian Era Romance

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  • 63920 words
  • About 256 pages
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18 comments on "From India"

Bethany Swafford on Oct. 5, 2017, 4:38 p.m. said:

Bethany Swafford


There seemed to be an excessive amount of adverbs.

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Jennifer Bellevue on Oct. 5, 2017, 5:40 p.m. said:

Jennifer Bellevue


Thanks for taking the time to read From India. I appreciate your feedback. :)

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Elena Horne on Oct. 1, 2017, 11:31 p.m. said:

Elena Horne


Excellent hook in the opening scene, I was intrigued by the very first sentence. I was also impressed that you continued to stir in suspense throughout the first three chapters. Whatever India is planning I am definitely invested enough to find out. I found it especially intriguing that she wants to get married right away and isn't that picky about who. This is a type of heroine I haven't seen before.

My only suggestion is to bring readers into the physical scene (location) sooner during the first London scene. It was unclear where India, Aunt Felicity and Eliza were speaking and I was startled when I found out the maid was doing India's hair. Where were they before? I didn't even realize they were hosting a dinner until much later. Some sensory details earlier on in this scene would create an even stronger mental picture.

Good luck with this. I am excited to read the rest.

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Jennifer Bellevue on Oct. 2, 2017, 4:11 p.m. said:

Jennifer Bellevue


Thanks for taking the time to check our From India, Elena. Your feedback is really help. :)

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Tara Tsai on Sept. 28, 2017, 2:51 p.m. said:

Tara Tsai


Hi Jennifer!

Oooh, I love the cliffhanger at the end of chapter three. What in the world was Olivia doing? I love India and her brash determination to right the wrongs done to her mother. Even to the point of getting married! I also enjoy that her character is far from perfect, not understanding the graces of current London society and also not believing in the fantasy that is a “love match”. Hah, great details. I also loved the way your writing flowed and that your descriptions and word selection seemed appropriate to the time period.

If I had to suggest one thing for improvement, I would say: be less secretive about India’s plans in the beginning. Instead of saying “because of what she had to do” say something more like “because of her plan to avenge her mother.” I know there is a certain amount of suspense that you need to keep for India’s plan, but you can reveal the outline of it without giving it fully away. That way you can tease your readers enough and string us along more effectively!

Thanks so much for sharing. I wish I had more time to read, but unfortunately, I do not. Best of luck this season! I’ll be rooting for you.

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Jennifer Bellevue on Oct. 2, 2017, 4:10 p.m. said:

Jennifer Bellevue


Thanks for taking the time to check out From India, Tara. I'm glad you enjoyed it so far. Your comments are super helpful and I'll definitely be taking them on board. :)

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BornToWrite47 on Sept. 20, 2017, 11:34 p.m. said:

BornToWrite47


The pacing is fantastic! I'm intrigued and spell-bound with two plot elements: her mother's death and this Lord Russell. :)

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Jennifer Bellevue on Sept. 21, 2017, 11:31 a.m. said:

Jennifer Bellevue


Thank you so much for taking the time to read From India. I'm glad you are enjoying it so far.

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Erin @ Readingwithwrin on Sept. 12, 2017, 10:47 p.m. said:

Erin @ Readingwithwrin


I like how we're learning about the main characters past. I love the historical accuracy when it comes to how servants were treated, and the age restriction placed on women when it came to marriage. The fact that the main character also knows that as the oldest daughter with no sons in the family she has to marry rich in order for her sister to have good prospects is accurate.
I'm enthralled not only by the mystery of who killed her mother, but now also where her old childhood friend has gone, and if possible could he have family that is rich?

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Jennifer Bellevue on Sept. 16, 2017, 8:31 a.m. said:

Jennifer Bellevue


Thanks for taking the time to read From India. I hope you enjoy the rest of it. 😊

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