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Lost and Alone Jim.Daddio

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After college, he is drafted to play pro football. After several injuries, he is addicted to pain pills. After he’s drugged and robbed, he finds himself lost and alone and wanting to get back home.

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  • 43814 words
  • About 175 pages
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2 comments on "Lost and Alone"

Kim on Sept. 22, 2017, 11:35 p.m. said:

Kim


A great story and great message! It kept me interested in how the story would end. It could have ended several different ways. Well written (except for several typos) and easy to read. I like that the writer did not go into extreme detail at every corner. Too much detail makes for a tedious read. However, the characters and each major turning point in the story could have had more depth to draw the reader into the experience as if actually there feeling it and living it with the main character versus simply reading about it.

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Kim on Sept. 22, 2017, 4:46 p.m. said:

Kim


I like how the story is written. It is easy to read and there isn't too much detail. I have no clue where the story is leading. Is it about the main character's sexuality? Is it about his football career? Will he become a preacher? Will he be set up by a jealous "friend" and lose all his opportunites? I am curious, so I am compelled to continue reading even though there isn't one particular path the writer is taking me down. There are 2 or 3 typos in the manuscript.

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