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Never Say Goodbye Kayla

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Wendy loves her family more than anything else in the world. When they're taken from her by a group of unscrupulous pirates, it's up to her to save them. She's always been taught never to trust a creature, but when two end up rescuing her and helping her run from the pirates, it's difficult for her to know who her allies could be. Peter Pan is a fairy, egotistical with a quick grin, and Tiger Lily is fiercer than anyone Wendy has ever had the chance to meet. As she's forced to spend time with them--risking life, limb, and sanity while they're on the run--she reconsiders how she's always viewed creatures and reflects on how her past landed her in the trouble she's in. Because if Captain Hook wants anything, it's to capture Peter Pan, and Wendy is stuck in the middle of their fight.

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6 comments on "Never Say Goodbye"

Maddi on June 30, 2016, 4:38 p.m. said:

Maddi


The story is really good, it had me hooked from the first sentence. Although, there are a couple of grammar mistakes.

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Kayla on July 4, 2016, 3:26 p.m. said:

Kayla


Thank you so much for reading! I'll definitely need to take another look at the manuscript then for some grammatical errors!

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WinnieC on Nov. 5, 2015, 6:39 p.m. said:

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I loved it! I really enjoyed how it wasn't just a mindless retelling of the fairytale. It made you think, and feel the characters emotions. I personally would love to know what happened with Peter and Wendy, and if Peter ever matured, and if they ever got together. Overall it was fantastic!

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Kayla on Nov. 24, 2015, 12:39 p.m. said:

Kayla


Thank you so much for reading! I've definitely thought about writing more because I love these characters and feel like more could happen. Thank you for your comment!

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ronsharonron on July 8, 2015, 2:59 a.m. said:

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The moment I read in the summary that this is a retelling of Peter Pan and Wendy Darling, I had to drop everything and start reading this. I'm a HUUUUUGE fan of Peter Pan, the story as well as the character himself. He's just so gosh darn charming and mischievous. However, I was always disappointed with how the original story ended because being the love sap I am, I wanted either Wendy to stay in Neverland or Peter to go to her world. I didn't want the adventures to end! I didn't want these 2 to stop seeing each other after creating this bond!

Anyway, so I thought your take on the fairytale to be rather refreshing. There is certainly more action and more serious issues brought up. I appreciate how we get to see the ongoing controversy and tension between humans and creatures. There were just so many misconceptions and misplaced fear and anger. I am glad that Wendy stood up for Tiger Lily when she did, even if it was supposedly a "stupid" move.

I have to admit that Wendy was annoying in the beginning. I thought she was whiny and ungrateful on their 1st trip to Neverland because she was being saved afterall, and there was no other better choice for her anyway. Even though she sympathized with the creatures, she still had some misconceptions about them, and she did not want to be near them, especially in Neverland. However, she did redeem herself, and I have to give props for her character developments! I guess there was a point to making her like that in the beginning. As she befriended Tiger Lily and Peter Pan, she sees how loyal they are, and she sees that the creatures do indeed deserve justice NOW.

Another beautiful change in your story compared to the original is that Wendy Darling kicked ass! I mean, okay, she was weak in the beginning. She was also complaining nonstop about how people called her weak, when HELLO. She really was weak, so I didn't see any point of her complaining about it if she wasn't going to change it. Then, SHE DID DO SOMETHING ABOUT IT. And I was relieved! She was aware of herself being weak, and she summoned her courage to do something about it. Props. Also, I like that when she made her 1st kill, she contemplated on the justness of it. She felt guilt, but at the same time, she logically knew that was the right choice to save her friends and herself. I think that was a very reasonable and clever way of looking at it that does not make her heartless whatsoever. She at least felt bad about it, but not bad enough to not kill the pirate. She made the choice in everyone's best interest. I admire that kind of thinking because it showed that she was strong (physically and mentally) and not ignorant about what she has done.

Tiger Lily was a surprise! I never cared much for her in the original story, but HERE---- I adore her character. I love how logical she is. She got shit done! In addition, she actually cared about Wendy and gave her support in her own way.

The story started slowly for me. Perhaps it was because I thought Wendy was annoying. On one hand, I admire her for voicing her opinion. On the other hand, I wanted her to realize that Peter Pan just saved her butt, so she should be grateful, and stop being so snarky. Then again, I could sympathize with her because I felt for her when she told the story about what happened to her family and her friend. She was certainly distressed. I think the story really started picking up for me when they finally left Neverland. Wendy became stronger and wiser through the course of their adventures. I even like the moments when she was vulnerable because her friends were there to support her. I particularly liked that scene after they came across the town where the man made the announcement about Hook's threats and Wendy's family. It was absolutely sweet when even Peter knew to (finally) be quiet and to just be near her and comfort her.

The relationship between Peter Pan and Wendy is what I was looking forward to most when I was reading this. I was surprised to see that it was a love-hate relationship. I mean Wendy hated him and then thought he was just incredibly annoying and egotistic. Sooo.. I was a bit confused halfway through the book, and I'm like, "Where's the romance?" I think an interesting aspect is that Wendy is fully aware of Peter Pan's flaws. I have to give props for exploring that because all of his flaws were believable of Peter Pan. While the original Wendy Darling adored Peter Pan and was fascinated by him, THIS Wendy Darling saw through his bluffs and antics. I was impressed but at the same time worried because I was wondering how is she ever going to start liking him if she keeps on picking on his flaws. HOWEVER, while I would have liked more romance in this book, I do appreciate the subtle sprinkles of endearment between Peter Pan and Wendy throughout the book. Their evolving relationship was SHITTY SLOW, but worth it. That was what I was watching out for. Wendy goes from hating him to finding him incredibly annoying to being grateful to him to liking him. I mean, yeah, she is still fully aware of his HUGE ego, but she also sees the GOOD in him now too. That is something. I love how they banter, disagree, and occasionally indulge each other. I LIVE for those scenes when Peter holds her hand or flew with her or comforted her in whatever way that he does. That scene when he took back about saying she's no fun, and that he likes her was just.. ADORABLE. I love those moments when she catches him not being as brave and strong as he proclaims, and when she sees him putting aside his ego for her. She may find his overconfidence and huge ego to be annoying, but you can see her slowly start accepting him for who he is. She is getting used to his behavior, and she ends up liking him because she knows that he is good at heart.

The ending was BRILLIANT. I admire Wendy for standing up to Hook and never once thinking about betraying her friends. When she jumped, I have to applaud her bravery. Then, when Peter caught her, I was relieved and could not help but love this moment. It is just TOO ADORABLE. They are both so ready to kick ass, and I LOVE IT. I am pleasantly surprised to see Wendy killing all of those pirates. I also appreciate how she chooses to let the mermaids get their revenge on Hook. Now, THAT was wicked! I think it was the right choice.

OHMYGOSH. And when Peter Pan was about to complain, she knew exactly what he was going to say. And AWWW. My fangirl's heart is squealing because of that one kiss. It's on the cheek and totally innocent, but I WILL TAKE IT because I love seeing their relationship develop into something so cute and endearing. I cannot help but smile when I read later on that after she kissed his cheek, he started being around her and closer EVEN MORE, brushing against her and offering her to fly with him when her feet got tire and "casually" holding her hand. OHMYGOSH. He is such a puppy! And the fact that she doesn't know if she finds this annoying, I have hope that she really does like him deep at heart. I don't think anyone can resist that. The very subtle specks of romance in this book, I WILL TAKE, and I guess that makes all these scenes even more precious to read.

When they finally made it back to Neverland again, I love how much Wendy has changed since the last time she was there! Her character developments are so on point, 1st with her loyalty and respect to her new friends, 2nd with her becoming a total badass, and 3rd with her dedication to the creatures' cause. I love that she feels like she has a purpose now, getting rid of the pirates, freeing the creatures from the prison, and educating people about the creatures' true nature. I was scared when she said she cannot stay in Neverland for too long because I'm like, "THIS CAN'T BE GOODBYE. WHAT ABOUT THE TITLE!?" I was relieved to see Tiger Lily volunteer to help out, and ECSTATIC when Peter Pan being.. well.. Peter Pan.. volunteering to knock out some bad guys. THIS SCENE WAS TOO SWEET. LOVE IT. And the 2nd kiss. Oh, gosh. Even Wendy cannot help but find him utterly endearing no matter how annoying he can get. She is warming up to him. I love this ending! I mean, yeah, there are still uncertainties about the future, but the trio are together, ready to embark on more adventures, and making a change in the world. Sure beats the original Peter Pan ending, for sure.

Overall, I LOVE this retelling. It started slowly, but once the character developments and action started kicking in, I was hooked (pardon the pun)! I admire how you made Wendy become stronger and wiser. She kicked ass! In addition, I adore the brilliant Tiger Lily who was so helpful during this journey, and I'm glad that Wendy develops a friendship with her. The ending turned out to be splendid!! This story is just so adventurous and fun-loving, but I also like that you added some serious components, such as the mistreatments that the creatures get. I like the ending with the trio having a new purpose and a promise that future adventures will undoubtedly ensue. I would have wanted more romance, sure, but I appreciate that you made the relationship between Peter Pan and Wendy Darling take a different turn. The subtle romance in this book was worth reading. By the time I finished this book, I was grinning like an idiot.

Thank you for this story! :)

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Kayla on July 8, 2015, 10:52 p.m. said:

Kayla


Thank you so, so much for reading! I was nervous about having the romance so low-key (even as I was writing, Wendy was being stubborn!). I'm also really passionate about Peter Pan and wondered what kind of situation could lead to Wendy joining with Peter instead of them splitting ways--which led to this! I'm so glad that you liked my story and grateful that you took the time to read it!

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