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NeverHeart Emma Redfern

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Wendy thought she knew Neverland.

She thought she knew all of it’s secrets, all of it’s shadows but most of all she thought she would never see it again. That was until an old foe carries her away under the cover of darkness and takes her back there in search of vengeance; holding her father to ransom unless she helps him lure Peter Pan back to Neverland.

However the land of dreams and nightmares she returns to is much changed to what she remembered and Wendy learns that everything isn’t as black and white as who is good and who is evil. There is something much deeper running beneath the surface.

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  • 86575 words
  • About 346 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    6

  • Tears

    5

  • Laughs

    4

  • Thrills

    6

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7 comments on "NeverHeart"

Nobody359 on June 8, 2017, 9:55 p.m. said:

Nobody359


I really like how u introduced the characters and the plot line! You did a great job of drawing in the reader and getting them interested in what she chooses and how Hook will react!

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AdeolaTee on May 25, 2017, 11:17 p.m. said:

AdeolaTee


Peter pan!

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Lizzie May on May 12, 2017, 2:03 p.m. said:

Lizzie May


I loved the Wendy/Hook pairing, and I think the plot was super interesting! There were lots of grammatical errors that should be fixed, and your formatting with quotes is incorrect. It should be:
"Blah blah blah," she said. NOT "Blah blah blah." She said.
The plot sometimes moved a little too quickly, with certain events seeming rushed. Also, the whole point of Hook capturing Wendy was to get Peter Pan back to Neverland, but Peter never makes an appearance until the very end, when all we see of him is an invitation. It would have been very interesting to see the dynamics between the characters had Peter come after Wendy. But without him included, that detail seems to trail off with no closure.

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Emma Redfern on May 14, 2017, 7:17 a.m. said:

Emma Redfern


I'm really glad you liked the pairing and the plot. It's really great to get your feedback! The grammatical errors are being sorted in the next draft so that should make it all flow a little better. Were there any events or parts of the plot in particular that you felt moved too quickly? This book is the first in a duology, with Peter Pan being included a lot more in the second book so you will be seeing a lot more of him then.

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Fae Lacey on Sept. 3, 2016, 1:09 p.m. said:

Fae Lacey


I really liked this story and I loved how it explored a new take on Neverland. The dialogue flowed naturally between the characters which carried the story well. Grammar, spelling and the use of paragraphs is something that could be looked at in the next edit to improve the book as a whole but it did not take away from the story itself. Overall I really enjoyed reading this book and I can't wait for the next installment.

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Sarah Penney on Aug. 22, 2016, 1:48 p.m. said:

Sarah Penney


I definitely am enjoying the story so far. The concept of the shadows as well as Wendy's thought process is very intriguing, and lends to the building of a larger plot. I did notice quite a few errors regarding commas and periods in relation to dialogue, but it's nothing a good edit won't fix.

Regardless, I can't wait to see what happens next and to read about what Hook has in store for Wendy.

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Emma Redfern on Aug. 22, 2016, 4:07 p.m. said:

Emma Redfern


I'm glad you're enjoying it so far and I hope you continue to as you keep reading! Any feedback is great and I will definitely take it on board in my next edit.

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