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On Our Way Gabrielle Deppe

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Adrian Fletcher is an American with a visa working in London. He loves the city, he loves the people and he especially loves his job. What else does he love? That cute guy with the blue eyes he sees every morning on the tube to work. All Adrian can do is stare and hope that he doesn't get caught.

Arthur Gatiss has lived all his life in London. He barely notices the handsome guy with the hazel eyes across him as he is too busy trying to safe his relationship with his girlfriend.

Until their paths cross at a party at Adrian's home.

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  • 80103 words
  • About 320 pages
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  • Heat

    5

  • Tears

    7

  • Laughs

  • Thrills

    6

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19 comments on "On Our Way"

sohma on Oct. 28, 2017, 11:26 p.m. said:

sohma


I really liked the concept of the story, but I think there are some places for improvement. The tense keeps changing—I know it’s in the past tense, but there are a lot of instances where it’s in the present tense. There are also a few run-on sentences that could be broken up with a few semicolons. Now, for some nitpick-y things: there are so many mentions of Arthur’s eye color! I know that’s what Adrian likes most about him, but gosh, I wanted to hear about Arthur’s other attributes. I also wanted to mention that there are some parts where using a third person narration kind of “disconnected” me from the story; there were so many details about Adrian’s routine, and so much exposition for things that didn’t really require explanations, that I ended up feeling disinterested. Despite all of my criticisms, I really like this story and want to see it through. The secondary characters are really charming, and I want to know if Adrian ever finishes reading Ana Karenina!

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Kaiiii on Oct. 13, 2017, 6:19 p.m. said:

Kaiiii


First of all Grant is a d*ck. Like he's lucky I'm not a character cause I will hunt him down to the ends of the earth and smack him. Second of all, this is amazing. I nearly cried 5 times. Nearly because I'm still in school and don't need the teachers knowing. Again it is an amazing book but I am left unsatisfied with the ending. What happens now? Will there be a sequel? I hope there will be! I want to see Grant get his a** beat and I want a happy ending for Arthur and Adrian.

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Gabrielle Deppe on Oct. 17, 2017, 6:16 p.m. said:

Gabrielle Deppe


Thank you so much! This actually made me so happy to read. There is no sequel unfortunately, but there is an unwritten “15 years later” idea for a short story idea in my head for this. :-)

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halfbloodwitch on Aug. 24, 2017, 4:35 p.m. said:

halfbloodwitch


I'm speechless. Honestly, I'm speechless. This story was beautiful, and the characters were very well written, and I can't believe that I read this whole thing in one sitting. I loved how it kept us at the edge of our seats, and how brutally realistic this story was. Thank you so much for writing this, it's wonderful.

You cannot compare this story to any one that I have ever read. It's unique, and very very honest.

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Gabrielle Deppe on Sept. 13, 2017, 11:25 a.m. said:

Gabrielle Deppe


Thank you so much! It means a lot to me that you really enjoyed it. :)

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halfbloodwitch on Aug. 24, 2017, 2:38 p.m. said:

halfbloodwitch


It's great! I love how they went from strangers to almost maybe friends!

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weasenins on Aug. 22, 2017, 1:22 a.m. said:

weasenins


I really enjoyed this story it's was very cute a fluffy but still had depth. It could be improved by not having as many subplots and names with an A as this got confusing but otherwise it was great!

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Gabrielle Deppe on Sept. 13, 2017, 11:25 a.m. said:

Gabrielle Deppe


Thank you so much! I will definitely take a look at the subplots. :)

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caralin on March 20, 2017, 1:34 p.m. said:

caralin


This got off to a bit of a slow start, but I'm beginning to enjoy it. Throughout the first chapter I was more annoyed with Adrian than anything and I thought I wouldn't continue reading this past the third chapter, but the first conversation between Adrian and Arthur left just enough intrigue for me to keep reading no matter what. This is a cute start, I'm just hoping to see the plot pick up a bit more quickly as this goes on.

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Gabrielle Deppe on Sept. 13, 2017, 11:27 a.m. said:

Gabrielle Deppe


Thank you! I'll definitely take a look at the start and see if I can improve this. Your feedback helps me a lot. :)

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