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Pete and Daisy Tani Hanes

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Pete and Daisy are seniors at Columbia University, in NYC. Daisy is pregnant, and needs a baby daddy, pronto, so her old-fashioned granny won't think badly of her, and Pete is an exchange student from Italy who needs a place to live. Can a marriage of convenience, a marriage in name only, solve their problems? They move into the third floor apartment of granny's brownstone and prepare to breeze through their charade. They just didn't know how much the two little words "I do" would change things.
They begin to like each other, then love each other, then realize they can't live without each other, though they can't seem to tell each other any of this. There are hurt feelings and misunderstandings, a long walk in a rainstorm, a treacherous ex, a loud Italian family, and of course, a lovely baby.
Come see how a modern family is born.

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  • About 291 pages
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13 comments on "Pete and Daisy"

T. K. Yeager on April 25, 2017, 9:43 a.m. said:

T. K. Yeager


Just after Chapter 3 so far. I'm enjoyed your characters. They are believable college students and your writing is clear and to the point. I think sometimes it can be a little rushed and you could do more description in your surroundings.

One of my major questions is who is the baby daddy? I feel like you might have mentioned him at some point, but that's a big part of Daisy's life so I think it might be better if that was discussed in the first three chapters.

I would have LOVED to see the scene where she had to tell her grandma that she was pregnant and make up the married lie. That would be dramatic and comedic I bet.

Maybe you're planning this in the future, but I also think a fake "date" between Pietro and Daisy would have been helpful for each other and the readers to get to know both of them a little better.

That's my two cents so far. Reading on!

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Barnes22 on April 24, 2017, 6:28 p.m. said:

Barnes22


It's really good. I wouldn't really change much. May b a little more flirting between Pete and daisy

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Megrose81 on April 19, 2017, 1:18 a.m. said:

Megrose81


I think it is great so far! There are some basic editing errors, and dialogue could flow more smoothly in some spots, and have more of a natural feel; but I think the story is very intriguing and gripping and the characters feel real.

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Tani Hanes on April 20, 2017, 6:38 p.m. said:

Tani Hanes


Ooh, please tell me where the "editing errors" are; I know the formatting got screwed up and I lost a lot of the italics and stuff, but it sounds like you're talking about bigger issues? I hate having errors in my work, and I'd like to fix it ASAP...

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suziehp on April 18, 2017, 9:20 p.m. said:

suziehp


I really like it! I like the characters and the way they interact. The dialogue flows very well and most of the time I can really SEE what is happening.
On a small side note - Daisy seems to be okay with unprotected sex and I'm distracted by that. (I'm picturing STD issues coupled with pregnancy - yikes!)

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Tani Hanes on April 20, 2017, 6:40 p.m. said:

Tani Hanes


You're right, we def live in a "condom every time" world. But Daisy is pregnant, so she obviously doesn't show the best judgement in these circumstances....

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Jessica on April 18, 2017, 9:36 a.m. said:

Jessica


There seemed to be a bit of an incongruity between the two of them being poor students, but still (Pete especially) being able to buy expensive things: the rings, Daisy's pants, the romper...

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Tani Hanes on April 18, 2017, 11:30 a.m. said:

Tani Hanes


Pete is one of those "poor by choice" students, I think; they're the students whose parents actually have enough money, but choose not to take advantage of that fact. And it seems as though Pete and Daisy don't pay any rent to granny at all lol; This wasn't my intent, I just forgot to put in the bit where they argue with her about paying her! And I *did* check, I believe Pete could afford two plain platinum bands from Tiffany's, based on the circumstances described above...

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chanmapan on April 18, 2017, 7:07 a.m. said:

chanmapan


Tani Hanes is awesome in whatever she does x

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Tani Hanes on April 18, 2017, 11:24 a.m. said:

Tani Hanes


Thanks!

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