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Someday The Waves J. E. Warren

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Life in Hopecliff Beach is pretty lame. At least Scarlett Ryan thinks so.

Finding herself caught in a never-ending cycle of hot, humid days and cold, lonely nights, with an older sister who can hardly stand her and no job, or friends, isn't much fun.

Scarlett's feelings of isolation deepen until fate comes crashing in and sweeps her up to the feet of Noah, a local boy with rosy cheeks and scruffy hair.

The summer months fly by and an unlikely bond of friendship is formed, but not all good things can last.

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  • About 244 pages
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  • Tears

    4

  • Laughs

    7

  • Thrills

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27 comments on "Someday The Waves"

Lucero Pena on Feb. 13, 2017, 2:51 p.m. said:

Lucero Pena


Only a few chapters in. So far, the writing is really strong, and easy to read. Sometimes, at the start of a book, it's hard to connect with the protagonist, but that is not the case here. As soon as the story begins, you're drawn to the characters, and their stories, because of how authentic they feel. The struggle to rise above the consequences of a bad choice, is something everyone has probably dealt with at some point in their life, so it's easy to empathize with her. My only criticism is that at times, because of how introspective the first few chapters are, it feels a little slow. So maybe adding a little more dialogue, or exercising the 'showing not telling' method, in portraying that her friends have moved on without her, might help.

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J. E. Warren on Feb. 14, 2017, 11:38 a.m. said:

J. E. Warren


Thank you so much for your feedback and for taking the time to read the first few chapters. I'm really happy to hear you're enjoying it and the writing :)

I would agree with you on the first chapters being quite introspective and that there is a lot of 'telling' regarding her past etc. When I get the chance for a revision it's something I would like to delve into more :)

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Karah Rachelle on Jan. 31, 2017, 6:29 p.m. said:

Karah Rachelle


I just love your narrative voice. Gorgeous writing.

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J. E. Warren on Feb. 11, 2017, 12:52 p.m. said:

J. E. Warren


Thank you! :)

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Jocelyn on Dec. 18, 2016, 11:42 p.m. said:

Jocelyn


A cute summer read, although it was lacking some key elements. I liked the relationship between the two sisters, so cute! And Scarlett and lily were too cute as well. I enjoyed the beach town setting, I thought that was really fun. I wish that Scarlett had a good friend in the story; that was one thing that felt like it was missing. I think that it would be realistic for a teenage girl to have a close group of friends. In many romance books there is a reason that makes the romance interesting. In this one I could see the attempt (Noah is moving away for college) but I wish it had been elaborated upon more. Also, this manuscript had a significant amount of typos. I think another round of careful editing would really improve the story. :)

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J. E. Warren on Jan. 2, 2017, 5:23 a.m. said:

J. E. Warren


Hi Jocelyn, thank you for all your feedback! I'm really happy to hear you enjoyed reading STW, but I do agree that it still needs improving.

I had wanted to include a friend for Scarlett (someone new, possibly arty like her) but when doing my last edits/revisions it was hard to weave in without it being too obvious!) However, I would like to at some point look at this again :)

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Chen Yan Chang on Nov. 21, 2016, 1:01 a.m. said:

Chen Yan Chang


misswarrenwritesuk’s SOMEDAY THE WAVES is a fun and summery read about a girl who becomes friends with a boy in town and learns to get along with her big sister. I have previously read an earlier version of this story, so it was fun to revisit the characters and their stories! I think my favorite part of the story is the developing of the relationship between the sisters as they go from estranged to close once they start letting each other in.
*Here are some of my thoughts as I read your book:
1. I feel the prologue isn’t necessary. You can still incorporate the same information into the regular chapters.
2. It’s set in 2007. Is there a reason for that? If not, it would be better to have the dates more recent. Also, the dates at the beginning of each chapter aren’t necessary.
3. Haha, I love how Scarlett compares her sister Poppy to the old and clunky sewing machine!
4. I love the details and descriptions you’ve written in the book, especially with the craft stuff in the first chapter. Your writing is beautiful!
5. Haha, a 19-year-old riding a child’s bicycle. What an image :)
6. So far, Scarlett starts off unlikable with her attitude. That must mean she’ll change as the story progresses!
7. Haha, the sisters’ nicknames for each other are funny.
8. Yikes, she has a bike accident!
9. Noah is such a nice guy. I’m liking him so far.
10. I love their interaction. It’s so cute! What a memorable first impression she must have made on him!
11. Noah telling his personal stuff with his parents and his old, wild ways on the second time they meet seems too fast.
12. I really like Scarlett’s voice in the book!
13. Ugh, Gracie is a brat with her crush on Noah.
14. Lily is so cute!
15. I like seeing Scarlett and Noah spending time together, getting to now each other.
16. Aw, Noah gets her a Scarlett Begonia plant! So sweet!
17. In ch 12, there’s a lot of telling/infodump of what’s been happening with Scarlett and her growing feelings for Noah.
18. Aw, Scarlett’s upset and emotional that Noah might be leaving for college :(
19. I would like to see more conversations between them about his past.
20. Yay, first kiss!
21. I love the developing sister relationship. It’s nice to see the girls getting close and friendly. I love their talk about Poppy’s alcohol problem. It was awesome to see these girls dumping all the alcohol down the sink together. Bonding!
22. I would like to see Scarlett getting back into her art a little earlier in the story.
23. Aw, they have to say goodbye because he’s leaving for college :(
24. I wish she would start thinking about her future a little earlier, not because it’s after Noah leaves for college.
25. Maybe you could add more conflict and tension to their relationship, maybe even something from his past. I thought something from his past would rear its ugly head.
26. Yay, happy ending!
*I had a great time in rereading this story and noticed some of the changes you’ve made! Awesome job!

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J. E. Warren on Nov. 22, 2016, 5:52 a.m. said:

J. E. Warren


Thank you so much Chen! I remember all your wonderful comments the first time around (and was sad to lose them when I took it down to edit again), but am happy to see them here :)

Thank you for taking the time to post. I am looking forward to reading your newest story next! :)

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Ameera J on Nov. 15, 2016, 9:42 p.m. said:

Ameera J


The perfect summer read.

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J. E. Warren on Nov. 17, 2016, 12:56 p.m. said:

J. E. Warren


Thank you so much for reading! :)

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