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Submerged Melanie Noell Bernard

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Nineteen-year-old Freja assumed being claustrophobic while living in a compact, fully-enclosed, underwater home was the worst that could happen to her. That is, until someone sabotages the food supply, murders her fellow citizens, and sends her anonymous messages suggesting more is to come.

NOTE: For new terminology, please reference the dictionary at the end of the novel. :)

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  • 80808 words
  • About 323 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    4

  • Tears

    4

  • Laughs

    5

  • Thrills

    6

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26 comments on "Submerged"

QueendSheena on Feb. 18, 2018, 11:51 p.m. said:

QueendSheena


The interaction between Freja and Markus was hilarious and touching. This story was also interesting to read and I like the premise.

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Melanie Noell Bernard on Feb. 19, 2018, 9:15 a.m. said:

Melanie Noell Bernard


Hi there! Thank you for reading my story. :) I'm really glad to hear you liked the dynamic between Freja and Markus! :D

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Morgan Bernard on Jan. 15, 2018, 8:15 p.m. said:

Morgan Bernard


I really enjoyed the descriptions of the cloister and the uniwue terminology used. And loved the scene with Freja and Marcus in the hospital :)

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Melanie Noell Bernard on Feb. 15, 2018, 9:03 p.m. said:

Melanie Noell Bernard


Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I'm glad you enjoyed my fictional world. Hee hee! :)

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Steven T on Jan. 9, 2018, 5:37 p.m. said:

Steven T


A very good read. A unique and well established setting with interesting characters. There are a few terminology you'll need to know to get fully immersed in the world, but I was able to pick up on what they meant without using the dictionary (which I found out about after finishing the book). I loved the pace of the book and the action. I can't wait for more!
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Melanie Noell Bernard on Jan. 9, 2018, 6:52 p.m. said:

Melanie Noell Bernard


Thank you for reading, Steven! I'm glad you enjoyed my story and I'm happy to hear you'd be interested in reading more because, well, you know. :p

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Morgan Bernard on Jan. 7, 2018, 10:28 p.m. said:

Morgan Bernard


One thing that stood out to me is how often the characters addressed each other by name, something most people don't typically do in everyday speech. It threw off the cadence for me. Luckily, that's an easy fix to make :)

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Melanie Noell Bernard on Jan. 8, 2018, 8:08 p.m. said:

Melanie Noell Bernard


Thank you for your comment, Morgan. The excessive use of names has been something that quite a few readers have commented on so I definitely plan to go through and parse some of those out. :) Hope you enjoy the rest of the story.

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Sam Marsden on Jan. 6, 2018, 11:19 a.m. said:

Sam Marsden


I think it’s really well written with some interesting characters and it’s a great premise.

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Melanie Noell Bernard on Jan. 6, 2018, 12:10 p.m. said:

Melanie Noell Bernard


Hello, Sam! Thank you for your comment. I'm glad you're enjoying my story so far. :D

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