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The Other You CarysJ

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Never Let Me Go meets These Broken Stars in this thrilling science fiction adventure.

When Gia opens her eyes she finds herself in a world she doesn’t know. She’s in a tiny metal room, out in space. But this world knows her. At least the spaceship’s AI does. Gia wants answers but she’s not alone to search for them for very long. A handsome stranger named Wren seems to know her just as well as the ship’s AI does. But when Gia explains that she doesn’t know who he is, or where she is, his bubble of familiarity is burst.

“You’ve woken up,” Wren tells her.

Before Gia can press for more answers she’s thrust in to a break neck chase as part of a race she didn’t even know she was running.

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  • 40381 words
  • About 162 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    7

  • Tears

    8

  • Laughs

    3

  • Thrills

    10

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4 comments on "The Other You"

romina rae on May 21, 2018, 5:02 a.m. said:

romina rae


This story had an interesting premise, with an execution that I couldn't quite get into. It felt so rushed that I never connected with Gia, only glimpses as to who she is. If it's a multi book series I understand needing to have a hook to lead into the next novel, but I felt it all was so rushed we barely had any character development. I did like how Wren and Gia felt their connection even when they were in the other clones, their love seems true and I was rooting for them throughout the book. Talon was also a highlight, I enjoyed his point of view and interactions with others. I wish we had received more answers from Wren, and not just "I have some really important interesting information...and I'll tell you later" I hope in the next book we get more development of the characters and slow the pace so you have time to really invest in the story.

Brave New World, Fahrenheit 451, The Host

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CarysJ on May 22, 2018, 7:35 a.m. said:

CarysJ


Thanks so much for reading and leaving feedback, you're right that the pace is a little frantic in the book. There is a sequel, entitled The Only You, where I explore Gia's character in more depth and also the world surrounding the clones. Hope you're having a great week really appreciate you checking out my story : )

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Tom Au on May 10, 2018, 7:31 p.m. said:

Tom Au


A story of a "brave" (and unfair) new world. Two heroic characters try to fight it in an action-packed novel. The love story gets a bit lost in the "war of the worlds," so it makes a better adventure than a romance.

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CarysJ on May 11, 2018, 8:07 a.m. said:

CarysJ


That's a good point that its more an adventure story than a romance one! Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment!

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