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The Rules of Summer Camp Sarah Reck

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Bethie is a Pax Baxter fan. In the last two years, she's been to 21 concerts in 7 different states, has 435 live songs downloaded onto her iPod, and just earned Gold status on the online PaxBoard.

But, Bethie has a secret—it's not Pax she wants, it's his best friend, Aaron Mayze. Aaron is a staple at every Pax event and even has his own dedicated section of the message board. Bethie is head-over-heels for him.

When her mother's new boyfriend makes life unbearable at home, Bethie decides she needs a change. No Pax Baxter summer tour, no more mooning over Aaron. Time to get her head out of the clouds and back into reality.

She picks the only summer camp she's ever heard of—on one of Aaron's t-shirts. The last thing she expects is him to actually be there.

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  • About 270 pages
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  • Tears

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  • Laughs

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  • Thrills

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74 comments on "The Rules of Summer Camp"

Vanilla Camilla on April 30, 2017, 1:47 p.m. said:

Vanilla Camilla


I really enjoyed this and I have already read it twice! Aaron is amazing and Bethie is such a relatable character. Keep Writing!

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Lizzie May on April 25, 2017, 2:03 p.m. said:

Lizzie May


I think the characters were great, and the setting of camp is the perfect place for a YA book to take place. It reads a little too much like a fanfiction though (even if that fanfic would be for a fictional popstar). I don't think you need to lay into the Pax Baxter stuff all that much-- you have a compelling story and interesting characters without Bethie's one major flaw being that she's too into a singer.
You could also clean up the syntax and be sure to edit (typos, missing punctuation, etc.). I think the sentence structure could be more concise, and you can leave out some details-- like naming the camp director, who only appears in one tiny scene, is pointless and distracts the reader from what's actually going on in the plot!

Keep writing-- you are obviously great at it and I think you could totally get published one day!

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Kat Snark on April 20, 2017, 8:29 p.m. said:

Kat Snark


I actually really enjoyed this book! I loved the simple summer camp setting, the friendships and the overall premise. I would give this manuscript a 3.5/5 stars as it is. However, I think it has huge potential if it was a bit more fleshed out.
Friendships are such a big part of summer camp and going into that more would have lent so much more to the story. For example, we got to know Sam and Lea a lot, but not so much Olivia.
Secondly, the romance. I was expecting a much more slow-burn of a romance and I think that kind of courting would really lend itself to the story. A lot more teasing and interactions before they kisses and started dating the second time they met would have been a lot more satisfying.
Thirdly, I got a little frustrated with Bethie's refusal to dish out any indignation. She internalized a lot of her feelings and I think she should dish it out a little bit more. I think she more than had the right to point out that, yes, she kept it a secret that she'd met Aaron already and was a Pax fan. But, he also kept it a secret that he abandoned school and his life as he knew it to support his friend. I thought it was going to come out that he actually wrote the songs he was secretive about it. The fact that Bethie just stood there and took everything people dished out - Sherise, the rest of her cabin dumping chores on her and even Aaron - made me frustrated with her.
Thirdly, what was the deal with being locked in the boathouse? I don't remember the reason for that (or how they got out) ever being mentioned. I would recommend going into less detail about the unnecessary details and actions that don't have any meaning and fleshing out the story more. Especially in the romance department :)

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Kat Snark on April 19, 2017, 9:03 a.m. said:

Kat Snark


I don't really understand why Bethie went along with the plan, not wanting Aaron in the first place, and not knowing the plan. Maybe expand on this or late it more believable? What makes her blindly trust her cabinmates- even as she recognizes that she doesn't.

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Royaleisia on March 24, 2017, 4:58 p.m. said:

Royaleisia


Lea and Olivia don't really have their own personalities; theyre like the same person. I feel like Sherise's about face was too quick; one minute she was unreasonably bratty towards Bethie and now she's really nice.

The premise of the plot is great and your writing is excellent. I am definitely keeping reading.

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Tiana Smith on Feb. 16, 2017, 9:41 p.m. said:

Tiana Smith


This was a fun, clean story. I'd definitely recommend it for younger YA. There were a few grammar errors, which I pointed out. The plot was cute and I liked the camp setting.

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J.M.Colbert on Feb. 9, 2017, 12:57 p.m. said:

J.M.Colbert


I really loved this story. As someone who has come through a bit of a happily obsessive fandom I completely understand the way she feels. This was one of the most natural stories, both in dialogue and characters. Also as someone who never went to camp I really love this type of thing. Just a great story.

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NekoTheCat on Feb. 2, 2017, 6:59 p.m. said:

NekoTheCat


This was a fantastic, original story! There were a few tiny pieces that I felt were missing, but then again I just finished the Percy Jackson series not to long ago. I'm book-spoiled right now. Excellent job!

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Tiana Smith on Jan. 12, 2017, 10:06 p.m. said:

Tiana Smith


I'm really enjoying it so far (three chapters in). I'm getting some of the girls mixed up sometimes, but other than that it's been smooth reading! I like how you've been building the tension and I can't wait to see what happens next!

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jebeecher on Dec. 11, 2016, 10:41 a.m. said:

jebeecher


After enjoying Ms. Reck's previous book, "First to Find", I decided to try this one, and I wasn't disappointed!
I love the summer-camp plot, I think it conjures a lot of nostalgia and good feelings in your readers. So nice to read on a cold winter's day :) The plot was really fresh and interesting without being cliché, which I really liked. The rivalry between the two cabins was awesome, creative, and kept the plot moving while establishing a connection to the characters. Your writing style is really smooth, elegant, and descriptive. The secondary characters like Lea, Olivia, and Sam are really likeable and create great friendships without taking the focus away from Bethie. Bethie is a really relatable character that teens will see themselves in, she is cute yet just the right amount of awkward :) The slow, subtle build-up to Aaron and Bethie's romance is cute too. The only problem for me was the boathouse/jail scene. I was a little confused about who put them there and why, and how they got out afterwards. Other than that amazing job! I can for sure see either "The Rules of Summer Camp" or "First to Find" being published this season. Best of luck!

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