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The Tower Fall Maykathryn

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After an uncomfortable and frightening encounter with magic at age ten, Reese Parks skirts carefully around the Witch population. It takes a deck of Tarot cards in a townie bar to light the charge of electric magic sitting dormant inside her. With the seductive interest of Ryan Hayes urging her on, and the support of local Witch Quinn Huxley, Reese finds a whole world opening up to her for discovery.

But when another young Witch goes missing frissons of tension are exposed in Three Corners. Rivals are revealed to be enemies and Reese has to navigate the fractures in her dorm suite relationships while trying to untangle herself from the threads of the mystery.

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  • About 354 pages
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  • Tears

    4

  • Laughs

    7

  • Thrills

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101 comments on "The Tower Fall"

Samantha Hastings on July 4, 2017, 8:48 p.m. said:

Samantha Hastings


I didn't suspect Jarvis until the very end, so great plotting! Reece was a strong character that I couldn't help but like. I really liked the reconciliation with Riley. "I wish I knew" change to "I wish I'd known." About Riley's Mom. Loved Quinn, George, and Evan. I thought somehow that Evan's brother who left with the gypsies would come back into play.

Some things I'd change:
Don't mention the Catholic Church by name, just say Riley is very religious. Oddly enough I wanted Reece to end up with Evan. That would explain his overreacting around her. Also, I just don't think it works with Ryan because she innately doesn't trust him or think it will last.

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Maykathryn on July 5, 2017, 9:23 a.m. said:

Maykathryn


I am so glad you enjoyed the story!! Thank you very much for all of your notes, too. I appreciate them! <3

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Samantha Hastings on July 4, 2017, 10:14 a.m. said:

Samantha Hastings


I like it all! I love how even the landscape is witchy (the handle). Ryan is very intriguing hero. I like Amanda as the friend. I wish Riley wasn't so narrow-minded. I'm sure Reece is going to powerful so I can't wait to read on.

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DustyMachair on June 20, 2017, 11:23 a.m. said:

DustyMachair


I could not put this book down - I missed a night of sleep to finish it, and I've never felt like it was worth loosing sleep more than when I reached the climax of The Tower Fall.

I love a good mystery, and I could not stop doubting everyone. Every new character was a suspect, every little detail was a clue and even though I was SURE I knew what was going on, the ending shocked and thrilled me.

I loved Reece - I didn't relate to her right away, because I was a religion major and certainly would have been a witch studies major given the chance, but I could relate to her anxieties and the details of each little thing that was a stressor in her life. As someone who has read tarot for years, I have to say I definitely enjoyed the early scenes involving the cards.
I felt as if, while Reece reads cards in the bar, we were really entering a magical space. It was excellent world-building.
Sometimes, especially in the earlier scenes, your narrative wanders. This is easily corrected, however, and none of the details we are given feel extraneous.

I only have one question: Are you writing the sequel yet?

Similar Stories : Shall I compare thee to a summer's day? What single story can I compare this too?

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Maykathryn on June 21, 2017, 7:54 a.m. said:

Maykathryn


Wooo! This is such an awesome comment. I definitely danced a little bit when I saw it, and then read it like three more times. Thank you SO much! Also, I would be so excited to go back to college as a Witch Studies major. Sign me up!!

And yes, I have the rough draft of a sequel written but I didn't want to start polishing it up before I was really certain of what a final draft of this would look like.

I'm so glad you enjoyed this story! And thank you so much again for this comment. I am mentally sending you pie and warm knitted socks. Even if it is summer!

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HxH on June 17, 2017, 1:23 a.m. said:

HxH


I want a sequel in my hands immediately. This was AMAZING. The identity of the mystery killer kept me guessing. Everyone was a suspect! Reese was an interesting protagonist and I was very invested in her story. My favorite thing about this book is the magic. You could have skimped on the magic elements (some authors stay a bit too vague for my liking) but happily for me you didn't, and all the details were so satisfying to read, especially for someone like me who can't get enough of realistic portrayals of pagan rituals/fully fleshed magical systems in fiction. I believed all of it, and it must have taken a ton of research to weave your particular magic system together in a way that appears effortless. And I want to know what happened to that book!! I have a couple theories. :D There were some typos, but your writing had me so engrossed that they didn't detract from the reading experience. Overall, this was a real pleasure to read and if it were published I'd definitely buy it and read again. Thanks for sharing it with us!

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Maykathryn on June 19, 2017, 8:16 a.m. said:

Maykathryn


Oh! Thank you, thank you! That means SO much. I am so happy you enjoyed it and this response just made me feel all bubbly. Hugs!!

MayK

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HxH on June 14, 2017, 11:01 p.m. said:

HxH


I'm so excited about this story. I love witches and find tarot fascinating. I can tell by your attention to detail that you've done your homework on cartomancy, which translates to an enjoyable and authentic magical experience for the reader. Can't wait to read on!

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Maykathryn on June 19, 2017, 8:14 a.m. said:

Maykathryn


Thank you!! I love tarot, I collect different kinds of decks. Glad everything felt magical at the start for you!

MayK

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Reina Galí on June 11, 2017, 1:13 p.m. said:

Reina Galí


I really loved this book. Honestly, this book is near ready for publication to me. I will echo that you can cut and combine some lesser characters, and there are some grammatical mistakes that can be fixed in editing, but the story was solid and engaging.

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