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The Tower Fall Maykathryn

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After an uncomfortable and frightening encounter with magic at age ten, Reese Parks skirts carefully around the Witch population. It takes a deck of Tarot cards in a townie bar to light the charge of electric magic sitting dormant inside her. With the seductive interest of Ryan Hayes urging her on, and the support of local Witch Quinn Huxley, Reese finds a whole world opening up to her for discovery.

But when another young Witch goes missing frissons of tension are exposed in Three Corners. Rivals are revealed to be enemies and Reese has to navigate the fractures in her dorm suite relationships while trying to untangle herself from the threads of the mystery.

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  • 88534 words
  • About 354 pages
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  • Heat

    6

  • Tears

    2

  • Laughs

    7

  • Thrills

    10

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80 comments on "The Tower Fall"

Megan Gaudino on March 24, 2017, 7:50 a.m. said:

Megan Gaudino


I think you've done a really good job of creating a sense of place! I love the atmosphere.

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Maykathryn on March 24, 2017, 3:32 p.m. said:

Maykathryn


Thank you so much!!

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Sara.Blevins on March 15, 2017, 9:42 a.m. said:

Sara.Blevins


I'll start by saying that I really enjoyed this story. One thing I really admire is that you created a contemporary tone that seemed 100% natural with just a few slight shifts that build your world. I think this is one of the most effective techniques because it allows readers to fold in the elements of magic you are asking them to believe with the familiar elements of college life and modern young adults. I thought you were very skilled at creating the world for your reader.
My only suggestions are minor. The first thing, (and I fully admit that this may be a personal preference) I found Ryan to be hard to like. I totally get the dynamic you're setting up between Evan and Ryan but I found him to be a little too unkind a partner to Reese, especially because I found it hard to believe that someone as sharp, funny, and quick-witted as Reese would fall for someone based on looks alone. So, I think what I'm saying is, I'd love to see Ryan in some scenes where he brings more to the table than looks and a thirst for more power, maybe a few more scenes of his vulnerability. In the end, you really kind of hit your stride with him, so I felt like it definitely improved as you moved closer to the climax of the narrative, perhaps a few more scenes prior to that core of the action?
Overall, I thought the story was engaging from start to finish. I was completely enthralled--great work!

IF I had to name something that it reminds me of....I'd say it sort of reminds me of Charmed? or, the love of my life--dare I say, Buffy?!

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Maykathryn on March 16, 2017, 9:05 p.m. said:

Maykathryn


Yayyy thank you thank you! That is wonderful to hear! And thank you for your thoughts on Ryan, that is super helpful. I have a specific tone in mind for him but it's important to me that it's a believable relationship if not ideal so this is great. I'm so glad you enjoyed it and SQUEE to Charmed and Buffy. Television icons. I'll blush!!
<3 MayK

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Sara.Blevins on March 8, 2017, 8:46 p.m. said:

Sara.Blevins


Wow! I'm really enjoying the story so far! It has a very natural feel and voice, Reese is a fascinating main character. At first I was nervous about balancing a large cast of characters but they seem vibrant enough to stand on their own. They have distinctive personalities which is to me the most important thing.

I like the tactic of Witchcraft being a known and understood element of the world. I'm curious to see if that is explored further. Looking forward to more!

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Maykathryn on March 10, 2017, 9:13 a.m. said:

Maykathryn


Thank you so so much! I really appreciate you reading and commenting and I hope you continue to enjoy! <3 MayK

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tabilin on March 6, 2017, 1:11 a.m. said:

tabilin


I finished! I really really loved this story. I found myself thinking about it even when I wasn't reading, which means you did a fantastic job.
The work and research of pagan and Wiccan traditions and lore shine through. It felt very real, never too fantastical for me to believe. I like how you had some elements that could've gone one way and felt predictable, but they were switched up a bit; for example, I enjoyed how Reese and Evan had a interesting relationship that progressed along with the story but wasn't romantic (platonic relationships that still have depth between men in women in fiction = yes please!). I was fearing a cliche love triangle with Reese, Ryan, and Evan, but was happy to see a more unique approach with the three of them's relationships! Reese and Ryan dating right off the bat instead of pining for an entire novel was something different and interesting as well.
At first I thought I had a critique of how easily Reese seemed to be able to read people and I was going to mention how she seemed to know too much, but then it all made sense, so kudos for dropping hints early on! The couple critiques I do have are more technical than story wise. Some of the chapter breaks and time jumps felt a little abrupt, and while the pacing was overall good, to me it felt a little slow during the time after Lizbeth's death and before the climax. Also there were a couple times I had trouble keeping track of new characters as they were introduced, but by the end I didn't have trouble. Overall this was a great story and I had a lot of fun reading. Thank you for sharing with us!
(side note-- my name is Tabitha so I did a double take a couple times seeing my name haha!)

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Maykathryn on March 6, 2017, 6:41 p.m. said:

Maykathryn


Oh my goodness! You are fantabulous, thank you so much!! I'm glad you liked everything, and it makes me super pumped when people think about my story outside of reading it! (Also, I too really needed a break from the love triangle and it's always a relief to know that a reader feels the same way since those became such a big deal in YA.) And thank you for the super useful notes! I'm definitely trying to find those drags in the story.
So again, THANK YOU SO MUCH. For reading, and for the thoughtfulness in your feedback. This comment totally made my day.
Side note: Tabitha is one of my favorites, even though she doesn't show up much here, and I totally love your name!

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tabilin on March 2, 2017, 3:07 p.m. said:

tabilin


Okay, so I'm incredibly hooked on this story already, I'm so looking forward to reading more! The world building is amazing, and I'm very drawn to the Witch aesthetic and the rules of magic in this world-- like I said, can't wait to keep reading.

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Maykathryn on March 3, 2017, 8:10 a.m. said:

Maykathryn


Huzzah! That's awesome, thank you so much!! I hope it continues to please. <3MayK

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