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the winged intrigue Zelda Sabel

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Two self-proclaimed badasses bond over their mutual love (and concealment) of classical dance -- until a crime scene opens up at their local dance studio. A friendship becomes an investigative partnership, unless real life and family get in the way.

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  • About 139 pages
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4 comments on "the winged intrigue"

ella1673 on Nov. 25, 2016, 7:33 p.m. said:

ella1673


Onky read the first few chapters, and I think this is a very interesting premise! However, I would've liked a bit more background; either dropping us immediately into the crime scene (as in first paragraph immediately) or giving us a little bit more filler of getting to know out 2 main characters, more about them at school etc. so the murder is more suspenseful.
I also think they would be a lot more traumatised by seeing a dead body - they are only teenagers after all!
I'm looking forward to seeing how this progresses

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SpeakWhenItRains on Nov. 18, 2016, 10:56 p.m. said:

SpeakWhenItRains


Great story! I really enjoyed it!

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Shannon Klare on Nov. 17, 2016, 11:03 a.m. said:

Shannon Klare


I haven't read this yet (on the to-do list) but the cover is fantastic!!! It really catches the reader's attention. Great job! :)

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Monique on Nov. 17, 2016, 2:05 a.m. said:

Monique


I like the idea of merging murder and ballet together. I don't like the way in which the body was found. Could have been a little bit more suspenseful. Maybe have the one of the main characters discover the body?. So far I'm liking the main characters.
Oh and maybe the dead person should be someone the reader would like, so that you want the killer to be brought to justice? Just my thought, I don't feel anything towards her, so kind of not in rush to see if the killer gets what's coming to him.

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