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To the Girl Across the Way KM Settle


Elsie Nichols is the Librarian of the Old Library of the palace of Brierwood, which is under the reign of King William Phillips. There is a love triangle, but will love ultimately win or will it be a catalyst of possible ruin and tragedy? Book 1 discusses the beginnings of such a story of our young librarian and where her heart goes, but there are two men who fight for her and neither gives up. Each have their values and why she should be with them. One uses the past to try and convince her to come to him, while the other reveals his own past and brings her to his side, but will she leave man number two like everyone else?


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3 comments on "To the Girl Across the Way"

Skye Eastridge on March 23, 2017, 1:24 a.m. said:

Skye Eastridge

The pace seems very rushed

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Sara.Blevins on March 12, 2017, 11:21 a.m. said:


I think you have a really strong handle on dialogue, the conversation is quick and seems to convey good chemistry between your two characters.
I have two suggestions;
One is that I think Elsie tells us a lot about her own personality when it might be better served to slowly reveal through her behaviors and actions. You did that well with her tendency to blurt out factoids, but more of that would go a long way :)
The second thing that I noticed is that the action or pace of the narrative is like rocketing forward at light speed. I think you could slow things down a bit and give the reader time to immerse themselves completely into the story. That way readers are more likely to invest in the long-term with your characters.

At this point, I love your premise and concept and am excited to read more! Can't wait to keep going!

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KM Settle on March 12, 2017, 7:49 p.m. said:

KM Settle

Thank you. I will look into doing that for the next edit.

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