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Ugly Little Feelings Jane Rocs

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Undeniable attraction. No commitments.

Reiko's university life is supposed to be smooth and all planned out--graduate, enter law school, and pass the bar. Her future career is her top priority, and serious relationship is the last thing in her mind after her breakup with her longtime boyfriend.

But a blind date changes that when a younger art student, Akira, offers her an exclusive, convenient relationship.

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  • About 282 pages
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8 comments on "Ugly Little Feelings"

Cynthia Philp on Nov. 27, 2016, 4:41 p.m. said:

Cynthia Philp


I liked the opportunity to follow a young woman from different culture as she navigates a difficult relationship.

I think the short description about the book should be changed a little to better prepare the reader for what is to come: the location, the type of sex depicted, etc. The current description indicates there is an emphasis on school, but in reality this plays an incredibly minor part of the story (At the beginning of chapter 25 she skips the first day of school to clean her apartment).

Aside from grammar edits, there are lots of writers who write from a Japanese perspective, perhaps you could look to some of them for inspiration on how to set a scene/cultural issue for a North American reader?

I like love stories and this one had me guessing until the end.

Bridget Jones meets Shades of Grey meets Joy Luck Club (I know that's Chinese, but I'm struggling to find an appropriate comparison).

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Cynthia Philp on Nov. 26, 2016, 9:08 p.m. said:

Cynthia Philp


I enjoy reading about people in other cultures and would like to follow Reiko's journey, especially after reading the short description of the book. I think my mind would have been a bit better prepared if the description, or early in the book, a mention is made of where the book takes place. I too stumbled over the naming conventions, perhaps more strongly drawing the characters would help? For example, if Nanami's speech or appearance threads it's way through the places where she appears? It would help for me, the reader, to keep them straight in my mind as I'm getting used to the names. I would maybe suggest that you have someone give you a hand with grammar and sentence structure because that takes away from what I think will be a great story..... I'll keep reading!

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CimoneW on Nov. 23, 2016, 3:43 a.m. said:

CimoneW


The grammar could use a lot of work. Also, I'm unsure of the meaning of some sentences, such as "'I'm not after the results of tonight,'" or something like that. The story is very intriguing. I am curious about what will make the main character change her mind. Being curious is good, because it means I'll read more! If I were an editor, I'd be happy to look over the manuscript and give specific notes about grammar.

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Kate Priestley on June 18, 2016, 7:50 a.m. said:

Kate Priestley


I like the fact that this is set in Japan - at least I'm assuming it is, I'm not totally sure at the moment. It's quite dialogue heavy and it would be nice to be able to visualise the setting a bit more sop that I can get a better sense of the culture. There are also quite a lot of characters introduced over the first couple of chapters and I'm having a little trouble remembering who they all are. The first chapter is an interesting start and made me want to find out how she got herself into that situation. It also quite clearly lays out what kind of book it's going to be in terms of adult content, which is probably a good idea so that any younger YA readers could decide whether it's for them or not. At the moment I have to admit I'm not loving either of the main two characters enough to promise I'll read the whole story, but I'm quite interested to see where it goes.

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Melinda Grace on June 10, 2016, 9:27 a.m. said:

Melinda Grace


I read until chapter 10. This is very much an "I said no, but I mean yes" trope and I'm not a fan. Your writing was a little stiff and some of your cultural references went way over my head. Your dialogue is right on the nose and I wish there was more innuendo and figurative language considering the topics your main characters discuss. Your characters are often referred to by at least 2 different names, which is confusing because I don't understand the customs. At one point Reiko and Akira have a conversation where Reiko scolds Akira for calling her Reiko...but then at no point in the first 10 chapters does Reiko refer to Akira by that name, so when I read you description I was confused. You can assume your reader understands what you are talking about when it comes to foreign culture (foreign to me, that is), but if you make that assumption and don't explain anything then you end up losing the reader.

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Jane Rocs on June 11, 2016, 3:33 a.m. said:

Jane Rocs


Thank you for giving it a try and for your feedback! The names and honorifics were one of my concerns. I'm still trying to think of ways to explain the first/last name basis and the degree of closeness (customs). I will keep your comments in mind when I revise again. Thank you so much for taking your time to tell me what you think even though you didn't like it. I really appreciate it!

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Melinda Grace on June 11, 2016, 8:01 a.m. said:

Melinda Grace


I didn't dislike your book! It's just not my cup of tea, that's all. Fifty Shade of Grey wasn't either. I skipped through the rest of your book and saw the glossary at the end. That is brilliant, just ill placed. For this website, the first 3 chapters are essential so you might not want to use one on a glossary, but for publishing I would move that right to the front (or indicate in the front that the end contains a glossary). I'm going to go back and re-read your book now that I know it's there.

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Diane on June 4, 2016, 7:42 a.m. said:

Diane


Its too obvious that the charater in the story are Asians which is quite unique. As an Asian, this kinda shock me in so many ways but I don't intend to elaborate those shocking scenes that i actually noticed in the story. The relationship of Reiko and Akita really scare me because it's crazy, twisted and too mundane. I hated her for allowing Akita to be her companion thus everything happened in there has a reason. The title says it all what they had was ugly little feelings that only them can understand. They made it through despite of its oddness and madness. I refused to read Fifty Shades and this one is kinda just sort of like that but i got to finished it. Plus, I know some Japanese words in here already. Is the author part Japanese?

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