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Witch Princess djinnia

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Taken to the Vael by the Chae leader, Alice is plunged into a conflict between the Chae and the other fey of the Veal. She must make a stand to prevent war. What does she have to sacrifice to accomplish this? Is there is something more insidious behind it all?

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  • 69940 words
  • About 280 pages
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Swoon Index Ranking

  • Heat

    3

  • Tears

    5

  • Laughs

    3

  • Thrills

    7

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23 comments on "Witch Princess"

Mikayla Whitaker on July 7, 2017, 8:04 p.m. said:

Mikayla Whitaker


It was really good! I enjoyed every minute of it.

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djinnia on July 10, 2017, 4:55 p.m. said:

djinnia


thank you for loving my book. i appreciate it.

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Mikayla Whitaker on July 10, 2017, 10:28 p.m. said:

Mikayla Whitaker


You're welcome!

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Jo Niederhoff on Jan. 14, 2017, 9:05 a.m. said:

Jo Niederhoff


I loved this book, from Alice's sweet nature to the way no one was really who they seemed. There were a few things that bothered me, though. While I appreciate the attempt to hide the traitor's identity, it felt like you went a little too far and stretched my suspension of disbelief a little. I also wondered why Alice didn't worry more about her family when she was in the Vael.

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djinnia on Jan. 18, 2017, 1:19 p.m. said:

djinnia


wow. i'll have to think about what you said. if there is a specific place or moment that you mean when it comes mind let me know.

it's true about how alice doesn't think about her family. that is something i will have to address.

i appreciate your criticism of my book. Thank you.

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Jo Niederhoff on Feb. 7, 2017, 9:48 p.m. said:

Jo Niederhoff


I think you could just mention them from time to time; I don't remember her thinking about them with much emotion, though you could also work that as her being too caught up in the whirlwind of things to think about much at all.

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Sydface4231 on Nov. 12, 2016, 11:06 p.m. said:

Sydface4231


The writing was beautiful and well done. I'm just over this type of love story.

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djinnia on Nov. 17, 2016, 3:23 p.m. said:

djinnia


thank you for the compliment.

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on Sept. 17, 2016, 12:03 p.m. said:


This is really good, you got me hooked! The prologue drew me in.

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djinnia on Sept. 19, 2016, 12:03 p.m. said:

djinnia


thank you! i hope you enjoy the rest of the story. let me know if there's anything that needs work!

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