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Within a Dream Chani Lynn Feener

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Lily likes being a witch. Sure, aside from floating pencils and telepathically communicating with her three best friends, there aren't many real perks. Until it brings two of the hottest guys she's ever seen into her life. Of course, there are always strings, and this one comes in the form of a prophecy foretelling her saving, and eventually ruling, a realm she's never heard about in this lifetime. With dark fey suddenly hunting them down, Lily and her friends are forced to make a decision, complete the prophecy or turn there backs. If that isn't enough stress, Lily also has a choice to make of her own. Trust in their brooding dark haired guide, Larkin? Or the golden dream stalker Ronan? One claims he's her soul mate. Both want her back in a realm she can't recall. What's a girl to do?

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  • About 368 pages
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  • Heat

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  • Tears

    2

  • Laughs

    7

  • Thrills

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67 comments on "Within a Dream"

MB on Feb. 12, 2017, 12:35 a.m. said:

MB


The first three chapters are really good so far! They do bear a little resemblance to the author's other books, but I'm excited to read on.

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Katherine Chamberlain on Dec. 14, 2016, 9:22 p.m. said:

Katherine Chamberlain


Very much enjoyed the story! Have to agree with everyone that the info dump at the beginning was a bit much. I was actually worried that it was a recap and that I'd completely missed the first book altogether! Of course, now that I've finished it I want the next book!

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Jo Niederhoff on Oct. 20, 2016, 12:02 p.m. said:

Jo Niederhoff


I really enjoyed the story, especially the revelation that Ronan is the Dark. That's exactly the kind of twist I like. The part I didn't like as much as at the beginning. The descriptions felt overdone, and it felt like you were just throwing information at us rather than working it into the story naturally.

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Chani Lynn Feener on Oct. 21, 2016, 9:28 p.m. said:

Chani Lynn Feener


Thanks for the feedback! Glad that you liked it, and I completely agree with the info dump in the beginning! That's definitely something I'd work on when I get around to edits!

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Jo Niederhoff on Oct. 6, 2016, 10:41 a.m. said:

Jo Niederhoff


The story itself is amazing, and I love the cliffhanger at the end of chapter three. I can't wait to see where this goes, and I'm fascinated by your witchcraft lore. The only thing I don't really like is the way you use some of your descriptions. I think they would be better if you worked them into the story more rather than just stating what someone looks like or how they're dressed. It's the same with the backstory in chapter one; it felt too much like an exposition dump.

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BrennaMae on May 25, 2016, 3:24 p.m. said:

BrennaMae


I loved it! I thought you did an amazing job with the plot and I was interested from beginning to end. At first I was rooting for Lily and Ronan but then Larkin came in and you could tell they had a better connection than her and Ronan had. And then Ronan turned out to be the Dark, so Larkin won.

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Chani Lynn Feener on May 28, 2016, 3:05 p.m. said:

Chani Lynn Feener


Thanks, I'm really glad you liked it! And Ronan and Larkin, ;)

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charr2310 on May 11, 2016, 10:16 a.m. said:

charr2310


i thought this book was one of the best books ive read!

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Chani Lynn Feener on May 12, 2016, 10:51 p.m. said:

Chani Lynn Feener


Thank you!

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charr2310 on May 10, 2016, 3 p.m. said:

charr2310


no improvements needed i loves it

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